Eng 1101_Des. Essay
Mrs. Aiken
September 3, 2009
Semester fall 2008
Many people who first go to college experience different feelings. Some students are excited others are nervous. Many have a lot of thoughts going through their head about their first day of college. I was excited about getting roommates, going to classes, and exploring the campus.
When moving into Macon Place Apartment I was excited because it would be my first time being away from home and having my own place. When my parents and I pulled up to the seven green and yellow-orange three story buildings I was saying to myself I hope that I won’t have to climb those stairs. When I arose to the office there were two young gentlemen ready to assist me in everything about moving into the apartment. I finally got to the apartment it was quiet and peaceful. I was one of the lucky one to because I was located on the first floor of the 100 building. When I meet my roommate they all had very unique personality. My roommate was very different than I, but we were all there to receive a higher education.
However, the next two days after moving into the apartment came the “First Official Day of College. When I pulled up to the college parking lot I remembered seeing a lot of different kinds of cars and peoples. Driving around the parking lot looking for an empty spot only thought was going through my head was, are my professor going to be very hard and demanding like the ones of television. My first professor was upbeat and intelligent, the next one was tall and lanky he was super boring. The last professor was older, but she was enthusiastic. Even though all my professor different, they were all there for one thing to give students a higher education.
While there at the college, I decided to explore the campus. I remembered been surrounded by tall red brick buildings. Some building was much older than others. They had a lake located in the back of the PSC and SLC buildings. The campus was a nice size. The campus had wide sidewalk and very nice black bench to sit on top of them. This was very new to me because I was always enclosed in one building.
My overall first day of college was great. Getting to know my roommate and their personality, being able to connect with my professors, and locating buildings around the campus made me feel that I was really making a changes in my life.
Mrs. Aiken
September 3, 2009
Semester fall 2008
Many people who first go to college experience different feelings. Some students are excited others are nervous. Many have a lot of thoughts going through their head about their first day of college. I was excited about getting roommates, going to classes, and exploring the campus.
When moving into Macon Place Apartment I was excited because it would be my first time being away from home and having my own place. When my parents and I pulled up to the seven green and yellow-orange three story buildings I was saying to myself I hope that I won’t have to climb those stairs. When I arose to the office there were two young gentlemen ready to assist me in everything about moving into the apartment. I finally got to the apartment it was quiet and peaceful. I was one of the lucky one to because I was located on the first floor of the 100 building. When I meet my roommate they all had very unique personality. My roommate was very different than I, but we were all there to receive a higher education.
However, the next two days after moving into the apartment came the “First Official Day of College. When I pulled up to the college parking lot I remembered seeing a lot of different kinds of cars and peoples. Driving around the parking lot looking for an empty spot only thought was going through my head was, are my professor going to be very hard and demanding like the ones of television. My first professor was upbeat and intelligent, the next one was tall and lanky he was super boring. The last professor was older, but she was enthusiastic. Even though all my professor different, they were all there for one thing to give students a higher education.
While there at the college, I decided to explore the campus. I remembered been surrounded by tall red brick buildings. Some building was much older than others. They had a lake located in the back of the PSC and SLC buildings. The campus was a nice size. The campus had wide sidewalk and very nice black bench to sit on top of them. This was very new to me because I was always enclosed in one building.
My overall first day of college was great. Getting to know my roommate and their personality, being able to connect with my professors, and locating buildings around the campus made me feel that I was really making a changes in my life.
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ReplyDeletehmmmm. You should have comments by now; I'll go back and see who the slackers are.
ReplyDeleteYou did well as afar as poitn and clarity.It did flow very well and you kept to the point. Although when you are referring to 100 you need to spell all the numbers out like so"one-hundred" and if you are referring to time always make s use your st. martins guide for punctuation advice it's all in there but you did good.:)
ReplyDeleteIt was a great story but i wasent able to feel what you felt or see what you saw. just add more description.
ReplyDeleteYour essay has good description and it flowed nicely. It was a little unclear in parts where there were some grammer errors (commas and wording), but overall it was very nice. All i can suggest is maybe go through it again and just clean it up. Very good!!
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